Picowrimo - Day 1

[ideealisme.livejournal.com]

At twenty past midnight local time!

Greetings all. You know what to do. You know where to do it. Go! :)

Comments

[saki101.livejournal.com]

I have committed to more than one exchange. Yes, unwise. So my goal is to fill at least one during pico and make significant progress on at least one more. We will see. There may be gnashing of teeth later.

I am still on a Sherlock phase. I have an outline of the story almost done. Despite it not all being captured in written words yet, I have started fleshing out some of the scenes. This may also be unwise. There will be much revising. In this section, Sherlock has found a wrapped package hidden in John's room and is trying to puzzle out its significance. He has already offered one hypothesis which John refuted.

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John switched on the kettle, got out a carton of eggs. Sherlock was still buttoning his cuffs as he walked into the kitchen.

“Tea?” John asked.

“Afghanistan isn’t known for that kind of cloth,” Sherlock stated.

“No,” John replied, as he held an egg up to the light. “But it’s on the Silk Road.”

“I haven’t done anything to the eggs,” Sherlock said. “Someone there, then,” Sherlock suggested. “Serving with you.”

John lowered the egg. The sun hot on the back of his hand. John squinted from beneath it to survey the make-shift souk at the edge of the base, brilliant with silks, alive with a Babel hum.

[ideealisme.livejournal.com]

I love the way they go from eggs to war service without missing a beat.

I did have to re-read the line of dialogue where he does that though.

That last sentence is really evocative and beautifully written.

[saki101.livejournal.com]

Possibly the transition would be less surprising if the earlier part of the conversation had been there, too.

Initially, that flashback was longer, but I think now I'll split it up between another or maybe two other scenes. (Or not, of course ;-))

[stevie-carroll.livejournal.com]

Intriguing...

[saki101.livejournal.com]

Thank you! :-)

[espresso-addict.livejournal.com]

Sometimes just starting writing is the way to go, and leave thinking about revising till later. I like the little vivid flashback in this snippet.

[saki101.livejournal.com]

I am hoping this is so. Some of the scenes are slowly bubbling to the surface. Connecting them should prove interesting!

[jenn-calaelen.livejournal.com]

Very brave to sign up for more than one exchange!

Interesting scene.

[saki101.livejournal.com]

To quote a Mycroft line, "Bravery is by far the kindest word for stupidity." :-D

[six-old-cars.livejournal.com]

Evocative and intriguing as always. And kudos on the bravery ;)

[saki101.livejournal.com]

This story seems to be growing now. I wonder if I'll be able to split my attention when I get the next assignment in a few days. *gulp*.

[wiseheart.livejournal.com]

This calls for my Sherlock icon. *g* (Yes, I do have one now - took me long enough)

Did John think that Sherlock had (mis)used the eggs for an experiment? *g*

[saki101.livejournal.com]

Lovely, thoughtful icon :-)

Yes. John takes the cautious approach before ingesting anything in their kitchen.

[vilakins.livejournal.com]

I do love their interchanges, especially the assumption by Sherlock that John thinks he's been experimenting on the food. And his specific mention of just the eggs, he may well have!

That's an evocative last sentence.

[saki101.livejournal.com]

I imagine Sherlock just wanting to save time and bring John's attention back to the conversation they had been having earlier, rather than having him focus on not being poisoned by his breakfast! (No need to volunteer what he did with the chicken, for example, as John won't be cooking that for breakfast. ;-))

Remains to be seen if I can pull off what I hope to do with this particular flashback.