Picowrimo Day 3

[ideealisme.livejournal.com]

Greetings. You know what to do. You know where to do it :)

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[saki101.livejournal.com]

An excerpt from before John's visit to the tailor.

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John ran his fingers over the gouged stone by the Exhibition Road entrance to the museum, the gesture habitual, the feeling of gratitude fresh He smiled at The Sluggard (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/File:Lord_frederick_leighton.jpg) as he passed, mounted the stairs at the other end of the gallery. They were all survivors there.

Question 1: Last word, "here", "there" or delete it?
Question 2: Keep link in text, move to end notes, don't have one?

[ideealisme.livejournal.com]

1. Stet

2. dunno, depends on medium and audience.

The description is very evocative, and I didn't click the link so was getting it all from the text.

[saki101.livejournal.com]

Thank you! The link is a photo of the statue, not essential, but pleasant to see. I've read comments from people who find links distracting, even if they don't click on them, the colour difference can be considered jarring, it seems.

[jenn-calaelen.livejournal.com]

Good sentences. It is hard to tell about context for 1). 2) idk there or in notes depending on whether it is something people might need to check at the time.

[saki101.livejournal.com]

Many thanks! (The link is just for fun, nothing necessary.)

[stevie-carroll.livejournal.com]

1. Leave it in.

2. Depends on the intended audience.

Neat excerpt there.

[saki101.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

General readership. The link shows exactly what the character was passing in the gallary, but isn't necessary.