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picowrimo2014-11-21 10:01 pm
elmey.livejournal.com) wrote in picowrimo2014-11-21 10:01 pm
Pico Day 22
Here's today's post for your snippets, comments, thoughts.
It looks like I needed several in a row to feel better, but I'm now a lot more invigorated :)
The second half of the scene is beginning to expand in my mind now -- even if that's only revealing problems that I hadn't anticipated.
I seemed to need several nights in a row to refresh but I'm feeling a lot more invigorated now, thanks.
I seemed to need several nights in a row to refresh but I'm feeling a lot more invigorated now, thanks.
Having decided to split the scene, the second half is beginning to expand & take life in my head -- I think I'd squashed it down ruthlessly to the point I couldn't breathe life into it. Of course now I've just gone & come up with some fundamental problems with it I'm going to have to fix, but that's writing...
Finally managed it last night, yay! The newly split scene is beginning to take shape, even if giving it space to breathe is just revealing how ill thought out it was in the outline.
Finally managed to get some restful sleep, yay! And definitely coming down on the splitting option.
Unfortunately, I don't. And for some reason my muse insists that only First Age Elves should be in loved - a bunch I tárhely write. *sigh*
A day of rest is usually very helpful in getting the brain ticking again :)
Beautifully done, the sunrise letting the scene unfold before us.
I like the way you're able to show the relationship between Scryloc and Melyd with just a few brushstrokes, the way her hand falls back down to her side, and the way he won't brush against her--compared to his ease with the child.
Thank you very much! I'm glad to hear that. :-)
Thank you so much, I'm glad!
I was worried about saccharine there.
Not saccharine yet :) it makes everyone very human right now.
After that night, it was the best day ever.
I'm loving the intrigue here.
Thank you kindly! :)
I'm loving the intrigue here.
Thank you kindly! :)
No, you're completely right about that expression. It wasn't a deliberate anachronism, just me slipping up. Thanks for pointing it ou to me!
I liked the visual of the poodle biting the boot.
Heh - thank you. Now that I've introduced a dog into the narrative, I need to find ways of using him. :D
Heh - thank you. Now that I've introduced a dog into the narrative, I need to find ways of using him. :D
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