ext_1182 ([identity profile] espresso-addict.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] picowrimo 2015-06-19 10:36 pm (UTC)

Kudos for getting writing done around the socialising -- that's always tricky. I like the repetition & the hint of rhyme in the penultimate sentence. It feels very neat, just like the protagonist.

I'd probably go with the plural? I'm not sure I'd use 'to' at all -- 'at'?

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