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ext_27872 ([identity profile] el-staplador.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] picowrimo2015-06-27 08:36 am

Pico day 27

Here is the post for any comments, snippets or thoughts.

May the magic be with us all!

[identity profile] saki101.livejournal.com 2015-06-27 09:40 pm (UTC)(link)
(In the right spot now...) Nothing new, but I went back over the last scene and tinkered with the dialogue. A little from the middle-ish bit ~

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“You didn’t call an ambulance?” Sherlock said.

“He was bleeding and the ambulance would not have got to us and on to a hospital as fast as I could bring him here straight,” Sherlock said.

“To where you work,” Sherlock said.

Matron nodded.

“You assumed a risk,” Sherlock noted.

The matron’s posture had relaxed somewhat during the conversation. She drew herself up again at this remark. “To save a life, I would,” she stated and raised her chin.

Sherlock’s eyes flicked from her face to John’s and back.

[identity profile] stevie-carroll.livejournal.com 2015-06-27 10:12 pm (UTC)(link)
I like Matron's thinking there.

[identity profile] saki101.livejournal.com 2015-06-28 08:56 am (UTC)(link)
Thank you. I just noticed that I have the wrong tag on one of her sentences! So much for editing!!

[identity profile] espresso-addict.livejournal.com 2015-06-27 10:45 pm (UTC)(link)
Editing counts too! Kudos! I do like it when people stand up to Sherlock.

[identity profile] saki101.livejournal.com 2015-06-28 09:02 am (UTC)(link)
Yes! and the shorter the better. Although, I picture her as a sturdily-built short woman.

[identity profile] sallymn.livejournal.com 2015-06-28 10:38 am (UTC)(link)
Well done, but should the second sentence be Matron rather than Sherlock speaking? :)

[identity profile] jenn-calaelen.livejournal.com 2015-06-28 06:58 pm (UTC)(link)
Good for Matron! Very sensible and able to stand up to Sherlock.

[identity profile] saki101.livejournal.com 2015-06-29 10:25 pm (UTC)(link)
We may have a kindred soul.