Pico, Day 15

[elmey.livejournal.com]

Here's today's post for your snippets, comments, thoughts.

Comments

[espresso-addict.livejournal.com]

Slow progress, but progress. Posted about the setting for the 30 Days meme. About 160 words, some editing yesterday's, some going onwards. This is shortly after yesterday's snippet, trying to find even vaguely interesting ways of describing snow...

...A neat wedge like icing sugar dusted over crossed swords had crept in at the window where one of the shutters had warped enough they didn’t close. The snow that had stomped in through the roof hatch without bothering to take his boots off was more like yesterday’s porridge turned out in the slops bucket. Hard to tell in the dark with an inch of guttering candle but the gate-crasher looked to have snapped a couple of rotten roof battens on his way to the party. Guess I was lucky it was just snowmelt that’d been drilling into my cheek.

[saki101.livejournal.com]

But still progress!

Guess I was lucky it was just snowmelt that’d been drilling into my cheek.

Oh my goodness, yes! That place just gets more and more horrible!!

[espresso-addict.livejournal.com]

I don't think he's been paying rent in a very long time, if that makes you any less sympathetic. But I am wondering how to get him to go back to sleep there at night, which the plot rather assumes.

[elmey.livejournal.com]

You have a real knack for description, the scene is alive and we can feel the cold and the icy melt and the awful discomfort.

[espresso-addict.livejournal.com]

Thank you! It's intriguing listening to the suggestion that I'm ok at description, because I feel I'm terrible at it. I wonder if the Chandler pastiche is giving me the need to stop and describe, where in other styles I just rush past?

[elmey.livejournal.com]

That might be part of it. You're definitely painting pictures as you go along. And they're very effective pictures.

[espresso-addict.livejournal.com]

I hope I can transpose the knack into other styles. Who knows, I might even develop a style of my own one day.

[wiseheart.livejournal.com]

Progress is progress!

[espresso-addict.livejournal.com]

Thanks! I stayed up and did a bit better :)

[nineveh-uk.livejournal.com]

I love the description of the snow here, and the narrative voice.

[espresso-addict.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I spent a disproportionate amount of effort on the snow.

[sallymn.livejournal.com]

Again with the wonderfully visual language...

[espresso-addict.livejournal.com]

Thank you! Nice icon, by the way.

[sallymn.livejournal.com]

Thanks - the word sooooo describes me :)

[espresso-addict.livejournal.com]

I must get myself a writing icon.

[stevie-carroll.livejournal.com]

All going in the right direction! I'm glad I'm not in that room, though.

[espresso-addict.livejournal.com]

Thanks! I've experienced being rudely awakened in the middle of the night by a rain shower through the wall, which is probably where it was coming from...

[jenn-calaelen.livejournal.com]

Great description of vvery unpleasent soundsing snow!

[espresso-addict.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I've experienced being woken by rain through the wall, so writing snow through ceiling wasn't as hard as it should have been.