I kept on editing the latest scene; added about 150 words but then I deleted some. Still no onwards progress but I'm hoping the deletion will make jump-cutting to where I want to be easier. I promised Saki an extract, so have a short edited bit; this is from earlier in the scene than the bit where Cobweb is crying at him...
All those stairs sure got the feeling back in my feet. They also reminded me I’d had nothing to eat. I sloped down the canteen kitchens to see what I could scrounge but the cooks were still nursing their hangovers, and the place was dark and cold and empty apart from the smell of yesterday’s fish. That never left. Neither did my dream. It just kept on rolling round and round in my head.
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All those stairs sure got the feeling back in my feet. They also reminded me I’d had nothing to eat. I sloped down the canteen kitchens to see what I could scrounge but the cooks were still nursing their hangovers, and the place was dark and cold and empty apart from the smell of yesterday’s fish. That never left. Neither did my dream. It just kept on rolling round and round in my head.
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As always, I love the way you can create atmosphere with only a few words.
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I can smell the cold, old fish! *wrinkles nose and shivers*
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I hope the editing starts pushing you forward again!
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