Day 12

[vilakins.livejournal.com]

Here's today's prompt for you to post your updates and any excerpts and thoughts etc in comments.

Comments

[spiralsheep.livejournal.com]

That extract of Music II is rly good and makes me want to read more (as usual).

You have two "rather"s in close proximity though:

"I'd rather not have anything nasty happen to me, and given the choice, I'd rather nothing happened to you, either."

If you intended deliberate repetitive emphasis then you might want to use a stronger word?

[azdak.livejournal.com]

Thank you! And thanks for the suggestion re. the two "rathers".