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I've revised my story and sent it off to beta, but I doubt it will be back and posted before the wend of the month. It'll only be a couple of days though, and I'll post a link here when I've done it.
Congratulations! You've hit your Pico target splat in the bullseye, and with two days still to go! I see you managed to keep it under 10,000 words, as well.
I suspect the "wend of the month" is a typo, but it sounds like a wonderfully medieval expression for the turning of one month into another and I wish it was in widespread use.
I suspect the "wend of the month" is a typo, but it sounds like a wonderfully medieval expression for the turning of one month into another and I wish it was in widespread use.
I've had another go at the heist scene. We're getting there...
"It's his art collection they're after, the driver said so," opined a more informed individual, nodding in the direction of the van. The word spread instantly.
"... a whole house full of valuables. Paintings and statues and whatnot..."
"... degenerate? I should say so!..."
"... shouldn't be allowed...."
"... always thought that it was an unfortunate policy to allow so many important works of art to be concentrated in the hands of Jewish...."
"... some remarkably fine pieces..."
"... makes you sick just to look at that stuff ..."
"... years of investment in the arts..."
"... whole rooms with nothing but statues of naked ladies..."
"... worth a small fortune, I should think..."
"... millions of shillings..."
"... a king's ransom..."
Having had their hopes raised to such a pitch, the crowd was disappointed when two of the Goldberg servants came tottering through the front door, carrying only a single painting. It was swaddled in blankets for protection, and Mr Goldberg hovered over it in an agony of concern, like a mountainous mother hen.
"It's his art collection they're after, the driver said so," opined a more informed individual, nodding in the direction of the van. The word spread instantly.
"... a whole house full of valuables. Paintings and statues and whatnot..."
"... degenerate? I should say so!..."
"... shouldn't be allowed...."
"... always thought that it was an unfortunate policy to allow so many important works of art to be concentrated in the hands of Jewish...."
"... some remarkably fine pieces..."
"... makes you sick just to look at that stuff ..."
"... years of investment in the arts..."
"... whole rooms with nothing but statues of naked ladies..."
"... worth a small fortune, I should think..."
"... millions of shillings..."
"... a king's ransom..."
Having had their hopes raised to such a pitch, the crowd was disappointed when two of the Goldberg servants came tottering through the front door, carrying only a single painting. It was swaddled in blankets for protection, and Mr Goldberg hovered over it in an agony of concern, like a mountainous mother hen.
That's great! Can't wait to read it.
Crowds...bleah.
Very nice commentary scene showing the prejudices of the crowd and nice contrast at the end when it finally comes out.
Very nice commentary scene showing the prejudices of the crowd and nice contrast at the end when it finally comes out.
Finished the scene between Adrian, the Admiral and Chell. Here's the final version.
Adrian and Kali, Part 15 (http://kalinda001.livejournal.com/327417.html?#cutid1)
Working on the aftermath.
Adrian and Kali, Part 15 (http://kalinda001.livejournal.com/327417.html?#cutid1)
Working on the aftermath.
Edited 2009-11-29 08:01 (UTC)
It's an awfully tough deal to negotiate, given that neither side really has anything to offer that can't be instantly withdrawn.
Yes, it's one based solely on trust, something both of them find difficult to do.
Isn't it amazing that I hit the target to the exact word!
It's a neologism! {I've been so butterfingers lately.)
It's a neologism! {I've been so butterfingers lately.)
You'd like the series. Blake's dead. ;-)
I see Mr Goldberg is quite an actor himself! :-)
Well done! (I assume your idiosyncratic target was a words-per-day calculation?)
Hee! No, I just set the target to how many words I did because my real aim was to finish the story. :-)
Am envious... you managed more words than I did, but then you posted more days than me.
Congrats!!
Congrats!!
That's very well done, managing to get a lot of atmosphere and tension through the scraps and torn bits of dialogue.
And I love the image "like a mountainous mother hen." :)
And I love the image "like a mountainous mother hen." :)
I didn't write every day though.
I really should exorcise the few stories still in my head so that I'm free to strike out in other directions and think up more.
I really should exorcise the few stories still in my head so that I'm free to strike out in other directions and think up more.
Ten micro ficlets, 132 words in all...
They're here (http://sallymn.livejournal.com/438276.html)
They're here (http://sallymn.livejournal.com/438276.html)
It is! It is! *glomps* Well done for finishing it!
Yes, I'm going to try and keep up... well, not the same amount, but a higher output than before, now I've shown myself that I can :)
Isn't it amazing that I hit the target to the exact word!
Ah, see that's because a good writer like you can use structural limitaions as a challenge. Some people write drabbles, you write exactly 9265-word short stories.
Ah, see that's because a good writer like you can use structural limitaions as a challenge. Some people write drabbles, you write exactly 9265-word short stories.
He doesn't have to fake concern for the painting! The histrionics he leaves to Trina. (Although having said that, I have been toying with a possible plot twist that it is an entirely different painting under that blanket... It depends which version pays off better further down the line).
Crowds are scary. This is a nice well-behaved crowd, possibly because it's not very big.
Those are hilarious! And it's amazing how much story can be extracted from so few words. Most of the time you didn't need anything like 15!
Thank you! I'm not completely happy with it yet, but it's an awful lot better - and shorter - than it was.
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