Day 3 (Team July)

[wiseheart.livejournal.com]

Here is the post to update with any extracts, thoughts, or comments you might have for today.

Keep the fires burning!

(Considering the temperatures we're currently having over here, I expect spontaneous self-combusting on my part. *sighs*)

Comments

[elmey.livejournal.com]

What a pain trying to put all the bits and pieces of Breaking Glass together. I wonder if there is a neat way of working on a long story. Since I tend to write out of sequence, I have this big lumpy mess in front of me. I had a long flashback in the story, and I've decided to make it a prologue instead, it's less disruptive that way (I hope).
The snippet below is from the scene that will open the story after the prologue. Illya is playing chauffeur and has become distracted.
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He saw himself running up the stairs to the mezzanine of the Volksoper, brushing at his damp jacket, hearing the agitated sweep of the violins. Mozart, he recognized the first ....

There was a sudden crack and the notes in his head shattered.

"Illya."

He came to with a start and heard the noise again, louder this time.

"Illya!"

He sat up, disoriented; Vienna disappeared as Napoleon rapped sharply on the partition between chauffeur and chauffeured. He had not noticed that his passengers had gotten back into the car.

[jenn-calaelen.livejournal.com]

Good luck getting it all sorted out! I certainly understand - given that my current story is all over the place in terms of writing order and wholes in the plot and everything else.

Good scene - the description in the first line is great. :)

[wiseheart.livejournal.com]

Vienna is great - even as a dream or as a memory. *g*

[elmey.livejournal.com]

Aw thanks :) Holes in the plot... don't say that!!

[ideealisme.livejournal.com]

Oh brilliant! I love the start back to life from the daydream.

Re sorting out bits, I feel exactly the same as you do!

[elmey.livejournal.com]

and you have so much more to sort out! One of the problems is, that when I have an idea, I don't always have the patience to put it in the section it should go, and trying to find it later.... I'm always convinced others are much more organized :)

[ideealisme.livejournal.com]

My LJ has I think 75 entries tagged "second draft". I've had to tag the bloody characters too!

[saki101.livejournal.com]

There was a sudden crack and the notes in his head shattered.

I like shattered, it's implies both violence and fragility, and I want to run after the daydream and hear more about that memory.

(Sorry about the deletion. I put the comment in the wrong place.

[elmey.livejournal.com]

Well, both violence and a kind of fragility happen to be involved with this particular memory ;)

[stevie-carroll.livejournal.com]

Interesting opening there.

[elmey.livejournal.com]

I seldom have trouble with openings, its the stuff that comes after...

[muninnhuginn]

I liked that, especially the contrast between the pleasant sounds in Illya's imagination and the rapping on the glass in real life.

[elmey.livejournal.com]

I'm glad it works, that was the idea :)

[akane42me.livejournal.com]

That's great, that crack on the window bringing Illya out of it. And whatever he's remembering from the Volksoper, that sounds intriguing. I love the detail of brushing at his damp jacket, and the agitated sweep of the violins. Excellent description.

Writing out of sequence, dealing with a big lumpy mess... we are cut of the same cloth.