Day 11 (Team July)

[elmey.livejournal.com]

Good Morning!

Here's today's prompt for your writing updates and for any extracts, thoughts, or comments you might have.

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[vilakins.livejournal.com]

I wrote 605 words at lunchtime, and also added the wordcount from the manual as people said I should which makes my total look better.



An excerpt in which Avon is talking to Cally about his Anna AKA Sula:

"[...] And all along she was an agent running me."

"You don't know that."

"Don't I? The families of traitors are sold into slavery, but there she was, safe and wealthy and married to Chesku. Chesku," he whispered, and banged his fist on his knee. "Why Chesku? A new identity and a husband in the top echelon? Was that a reward or another assignment?"

Cally was silent, thinking of Chesku, shot in the back and his clothes used for a disguise. It could not have been a love match to say the least. "You said to me not so long ago that regret should be kept a small part of life." She reached forward and touched his hand lightly before leaving.

Avon waited until the door was closed. "And I said it so easily."

[jenn-calaelen.livejournal.com]

Congratulations on the progress! :)

Very moving!

[saki101.livejournal.com]

Very productive lunch time!

That's a great closing line.

[el-staplador.livejournal.com]

I have posted the first chapter! I plan to update every Wednesday, this being fairly reliably a day that I don't have much on. Here it is: http://archiveofourown.org/works/457304

[stevie-carroll.livejournal.com]

Heirs and Graces

Phase 3 -- July's writing:



More words today, and Edward is in search of advice:

"You've always played a risky game," Raymond said, not looking up from the table he was aging. "I thought I'd drilled that into you from the start."

"It's not just me now."

"It was never just you. What about Julia, and those artistic friends the pair of you keep around?"

"Julia's always been able to look after herself." Against most people anyway. "And Nicky can look after himself and Bridie."

"There's only one way I can see this working," Raymond said through a cloud of lacquer. "Bring Connie in on the game, and out into the open. Pass her off as Reynard's mistress, if you don't want the hassle of another wedding, and don't fancy the idea of living with her. That way no one will pay the slightest bit of attention to however many men you put on security detail."

[stevie-carroll.livejournal.com]

Great scene there.

[elmey.livejournal.com]

Still poking around in the first half, this is later in the scene where Napoleon is trying to get to the bottom of what's wrong with his partner. If you know the show, you might recognize what canon event precipitated this whole thing. Or not ;)


(Napoleon) poured a splash of scotch and drank it quickly, then poured more into the glass. He brought it to Illya, hesitated a moment, then hitched up his pant leg and sat on the arm of the couch.

He watched as his his partner held the tumbler in both hands, swirled the liquid around once, then raised the glass and emptied it. He continued to hold it loosely clasped in his hands, looking down into it, making no attempt to break the silence. Napoleon took a deep breath. "No. It wasn't you, Illya. It wasn't you. He bragged to me that he had betrayed you. Mandor was using us."

"He was using Uncle. Uncle was using him." Illya was matter of fact.

"He was using me." Napoleon's voice was bitter as he thought again of Mandor's words. He felt Illya's eyes on him, his dawning comprehension.

[elmey.livejournal.com]

Ah, Avon's cracks are showing. I like the way it ends with his acknowledgement to himself.

[elmey.livejournal.com]

We can feel John's yearning--even though Sherlock is there it's all still very tentative isn't it .

[elmey.livejournal.com]

Now there's an unexpected bit of advice! Just what Edward needs though, another layer of lies.

[elmey.livejournal.com]

I love seeing things I've been seeing bits and pieces of here as a whole. The chapter reads really well, and certainly whets the appetite for what's coming next! How many chapters will you have in the end?

[saki101.livejournal.com]

John hasn't really absorbed the reality of it yet and Sherlock said that what he was doing wasn't done, so John assumes Sherlock will need to leave again. This bit follows John entering the room where Sherlock's asleep (or at least he has his head turned away and seems to be). There's at least one fairly long converstion that has to happen, probably two, hence the slowing down.

[saki101.livejournal.com]

It is lovely to read it all flowing and hear it Elisabeth's clear voice.

But how to repeat the performance without appearing unoriginal?

I do so like that line.

[saki101.livejournal.com]

The convolutions! And bringing Connie in will make Edward that much closer to her.

[saki101.livejournal.com]

They're in Mr Waverly's office in the corner with the two small couches and Mr Waverly interrupts them a moment or two later?

[jenn-calaelen.livejournal.com]

~200 words on the Firiel story, partly because I got distracted into doing more research and partly because writing feels like a struggle at the moment, so no snippet today

[elmey.livejournal.com]

I can see why you'd think so, but no :) I'm going to be awful and not say what it is then, because now that I see there's no need to worry about being spoilery, I'll leave it at that.

[elmey.livejournal.com]

The research had to be done sooner or later; and at least you did some writing!

[stevie-carroll.livejournal.com]

So John had some subconscious awareness before that Sherlock was watching him?

[stevie-carroll.livejournal.com]

Congratulations!

[stevie-carroll.livejournal.com]

Edward wasn't expecting that either.

[stevie-carroll.livejournal.com]

He'll certainly have to trust her a whole lot more.

[stevie-carroll.livejournal.com]

Another awkward moment for the pair of them.

[stevie-carroll.livejournal.com]

Research is all part of the process.

[el-staplador.livejournal.com]

Dark and profound, this.