Today went reasonably well, with 538 more words bagged & tagged. Chapter 5 is looking a whole lot more fleshed out now.
The Pump Room formed the very heart of Bath society, where everyone assembled each afternoon to parade the latest fashions, compare the symptoms of their ailments, bemoan the taste of the waters, peruse the subscription book for the newest arrivals on the London coach, and, most importantly, exchange that universal currency of all watering places: gossip.
A little better. Now up to 2018 words, but I have some catch-up to do if I'm to do 20,000 by the end of the month. Have to stop cleaning the fridge and get down to some real work ;)
Leon kept his face neutral. What was going on? Gil had delicately taken this Kay by the hand, and was leading her out of the palace. What was Gil doing? Was it wise to walk off alone? “I heard tell that you triumphed in a fell battle, a few short months ago?” Leon looked at her in surprise. What was she talking about? “Come, walk with me,” Ree whispered. “And tell me how you vanquished the low-born cur called Adosco.”
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When Kay invited him to accompany her, Gil stood in confusion. He tried to catch Leon’s eye, but he had turned to listen to Ree. “Take my arm, you fool.” Whispered Kay. So Gil lifted his right hand, and gently touched it to the back of her left elbow. “Now walk out of the entrance. We need to talk.”
I'm off to Whitby on holiday in a mo, so like yesterday (mad running around packing day) I doubt much will get done today. However the laptop is coming with us if only as a dumping zone for excess digital photos, so maybe I'll be inspired at some point during the week...
Well, day three ended at 1008 with the completion of scene one (of seven) on my plan. So day four was the start of scene two, which is the one I had least prepared. Which means that achieving 1299 words by end of play was quite pleasing. Even if none of them are particularly quote-worthy.
The shiftsig woke Cortz from uneasy sleep. With a groan he opened his eyes to dim early-morning light. Good, he'd heard the first bleat and would be dressed before Inaera brought his breakfast. He needed to be ready to receive the nightshift reports personally, not rely on Farll to log them.
Posting here instead of Day 5 because this is what I was going to post yesterday:
1123 words. A huge amount of editing to do, but I have figured out how to deal with a major "Show, don't tell" problem.
Ivan startled a bit, blushed, and was staring at his feet when he said, "Lady Donna... You, you... that dress."
Donna chuckled at him. "Don't tell me there's something here you haven't seen before. From what I've heard, you've discovered the greatest advantage of not getting that vaunted ship-duty -- there are women around."
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on 2006-11-05 12:53 am (UTC)The Pump Room formed the very heart of Bath society, where everyone assembled each afternoon to parade the latest fashions, compare the symptoms of their ailments, bemoan the taste of the waters, peruse the subscription book for the newest arrivals on the London coach, and, most importantly, exchange that universal currency of all watering places: gossip.
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on 2006-11-05 01:08 am (UTC)Leon kept his face neutral. What was going on? Gil had delicately taken this Kay by the hand, and was leading her out of the palace. What was Gil doing? Was it wise to walk off alone?
“I heard tell that you triumphed in a fell battle, a few short months ago?”
Leon looked at her in surprise. What was she talking about?
“Come, walk with me,” Ree whispered. “And tell me how you vanquished the low-born cur called Adosco.”
***
When Kay invited him to accompany her, Gil stood in confusion. He tried to catch Leon’s eye, but he had turned to listen to Ree.
“Take my arm, you fool.” Whispered Kay. So Gil lifted his right hand, and gently touched it to the back of her left elbow. “Now walk out of the entrance. We need to talk.”
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on 2006-11-05 09:12 am (UTC)(no subject)
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on 2006-11-05 01:01 pm (UTC)The shiftsig woke Cortz from uneasy sleep. With a groan he opened his eyes to dim early-morning light. Good, he'd heard the first bleat and would be dressed before Inaera brought his breakfast. He needed to be ready to receive the nightshift reports personally, not rely on Farll to log them.
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on 2006-11-05 07:52 pm (UTC)Total so far: 599
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on 2006-11-06 12:29 am (UTC)1123 words. A huge amount of editing to do, but I have figured out how to deal with a major "Show, don't tell" problem.
Ivan startled a bit, blushed, and was staring at his feet when he said, "Lady Donna... You, you... that dress."
Donna chuckled at him. "Don't tell me there's something here you haven't seen before. From what I've heard, you've discovered the greatest advantage of not getting that vaunted ship-duty -- there are women around."