Pico day 9

[el-staplador.livejournal.com]

Here is the post for any comments, snippets or thoughts.

May the magic be with us all!

Comments

[avon7.livejournal.com]

Well, I really wrote it last night, but I wrote 320 words and started a new section of the story/ies which I'm not sure I want to write but I think I should. I hope I'm not head jumping, but I think I am.

“You’ll be all right in Slytherin. Stay away from Gryffindor and Potter and all those Weasleys. Study hard, make the most of your chances…” his father paused and looked at him almost helplessly.

Scorpius nodded. Anything if his father would stop looking so worried and his mother would take off that frozen mask she had worn since his father had announced he would be going to Hogwarts rather than Durmstrang.

His father bent down and gave him a quick and unexpected hug. Scorpius hugged back just as hard, trying not to cry. Draco pushed some galleons into his hand and whispered, “Neville Longbottom - herbology. He’s a fool but he’ll never hold your parentage against you.”

[jenn-calaelen.livejournal.com]

Around 500 words - although split over two incomplete scenes. The story seems to be moving along nicely and moving in the right direction. Hopefully tomorrow or the next day I'll have a chance to edit through what I've got and then be able to post snippets.

[akane42me.livejournal.com]

Another hour today! I'm pleased.

[akane42me.livejournal.com]

Very good progress! I like this snippet - the advice to stay away from Gryffindor and Potter and all those Weasleys!

[wiseheart.livejournal.com]

It is very funny indeed. Not a happy family, it seems.

[wiseheart.livejournal.com]

Oh, you make excellent progress!

[wiseheart.livejournal.com]

Go you!

Terminus, Chapter 6

[wiseheart.livejournal.com]

We had a long and boring teachers' conference in the afternoon (after I had 6 lessons with language groups varying between grades One and Eight), and then I got stuck at school by a thunderstorm, so I haven't done any actual writing today. But since people seemed to like Data and Rina discussing things, below is a little tease from a later part of the discussion, which will, hopefully, lead to the big action part, soon. *crosses fingers*

Excerpt:

“You can really make people do your bidding?” Data asked.

They were talking in low voices and the security guard at the door gave them their privacy.

Rina nodded. “Anytime. I try not to do it, though.”

“Would you make an exception for me?” Data continued.

S/he stared at him in shock. “What?”

[el-staplador.livejournal.com]

Oh, so we're seeing the Malfoy side of things as well? Intriguing!

[el-staplador.livejournal.com]

Nice wordcount, and it sounds like generally good progress all round. Well done!

[el-staplador.livejournal.com]

Well done!

RE: Terminus, Chapter 6

[el-staplador.livejournal.com]

Sounds like a deeply tedious day! Good luck with the next bit.

[el-staplador.livejournal.com]

265 words today. I decided to jump a bit further back in the story and give you all a bit more background...


'Really,' Emma said, 'I ought to let Jay tell you himself. But this is the favour I'm doing Jay.'

'What, letting him drive the bus?' It still seemed to me that the favour-doing was all on Jay's side.

Emma's eyes were dancing. 'He's got his own reasons for wanting to go to Leicester.'

'Oh,' I said, disappointed by the sordidness of the world. 'Dan? We go filming, and Jay has a dirty weekend away?'

'God, Phyl,' Helen said, 'you have such a dirty mind. He's eloping.'

The bus lurched over a pothole. I slid forwards and grabbed the armrest to steady myself. 'You're kidding.' I looked at Emma, being the more reliable of the two Ackerleys.

'No,' she said. 'I'm not kidding. He's going to marry Dan, and we're going to be there.'

[stevie-carroll.livejournal.com]

Today was mostly red pen edits, but people have been wanting to know what else was said between Edward and Kate, so here's another snippet from that scene:

"Not Thomas. You remember Father transferred the London properties to me back in '63? Well that was a sort of wedding settlement – since Connie didn't have any family who could do that for her." He felt a twinge of guilt at using his Anglicised pet-name for Consolata, but he wasn't going to get into a discussion of her Catholicism just yet.

"And you have a son? Why didn't you tell me before?"

"Connie took him to America. This will be the first year she's allowed him to come and stay with us for the holidays."

"You married an American?" Kate's tone implied that she might have accepted an American heiress, but one without family or wealth was most definitely beyond the pale.

[stevie-carroll.livejournal.com]

A great character study in that conversation.

[stevie-carroll.livejournal.com]

Progress indeed.

[stevie-carroll.livejournal.com]

Go you!

RE: Terminus, Chapter 6

[stevie-carroll.livejournal.com]

An intriguing request there.

[stevie-carroll.livejournal.com]

Things start to slot into place...

RE: Terminus, Chapter 6

[wiseheart.livejournal.com]

And the next days don't promise to become any better. *sigh*

RE: Terminus, Chapter 6

[wiseheart.livejournal.com]

Data is in a scheming mode.

[wiseheart.livejournal.com]

Talk about a bombshell being dropped...

[wiseheart.livejournal.com]

Such a mesaliance indeed! (sp???)

[elmey.livejournal.com]

Well I guess this is my week for whining. I did sit and write before I opened my e mail :) Managed 248 words but I don't like them. It's not so much that the writing is bad it's that I don't seem to be going anywhere that makes sense. Hmmm. I'm going to have to do some serious thinking about where these characters actually stand in relationship to each other and maybe narrow the focus a bit.

Well, that's what pico is for...

[elmey.livejournal.com]

This is a really good character sketch, everyone comes alive in the short scene.