PicoWriMo

Another couple of hundred on the Stargate one, including some small changes to the bit I posted yesterday, because I decided to try and make it clear that the dark nothingness Sheppard was in (which we got a first person description of) was thinner and patchier than that Daniel (whose experience I'm writing at second-hand through Radek, so it won't be easy) went through - this will tie into the fact that they travelled through time, not space, and the horror has had a long time to die a bit before it got to Sheppard :)

A snippet, because like so many fans I like hurting Daniel I do :)

With what might have been a faint sound, something like the memory of a death rattle, the darkness shifted... and Daniel fell out on top of Rodney, both of them staggering and toppling into a shaking heap before Radek could stop them.

Daniel was grey-white, lips blue, eyes wide open and almost, almost fixed as if in death, but the thin, ragged sounds he made that were as faint as a whisper, as piercing and agonized as a scream... they hurt, but they meant he was alive.

It was a long, oh so long, eon within a minute - the only sound Radek's breathing, ragged and harsh and Rodney's even more so - before Daniel gasped and bit down on the moan, choking them off with an effort that the others could almost feel, then closed his eyes and forced himself to breathe.