ext_41457 ([identity profile] wiseheart.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] picowrimo2016-07-19 11:24 am

July Pico, Day 19

Here is today's post for your progress report, snippets and thoughts.

May the magic be with us all!

[identity profile] ideealisme.livejournal.com 2016-07-19 03:08 pm (UTC)(link)
Been writing most days but terrible at updating, sorry!

Lucia gets into a pickle and gets rescued. On the (long) car journey home:
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“When I left,” Edmund continued, “I took the risk that someone else would pay you attention in my absence. Perhaps even someone in the Coterie! When I returned, I half expected you to be married. I was surprised to see you still alone. Concerned, to be frank. I always had that feeling you were vulnerable. I hoped someone would step forward.”

Vulnerable. That was how he was going to put it. A diplomat, he should have been. I felt a slight pang of resentment.

“As long as it wasn’t you, Edmund? Did you think me too much to take on?”

“I knew nothing of your life, Lucia. Of course I didn’t think that.”

Oh but now you do, yes!

“Don’t look at me like that,” he said hurriedly. “There was – a prior arrangement at home in the States. I thought I should honour it. But when I returned I realised that my bond with you had not been broken. To tell you the truth,” he pressed my hands again, “I don’t care where you’ve been or what you’ve done. I never did. When I read the letter I was surprised, don’t get me wrong. But you were in the middle of a war” – and he looked at me all a-tender and made my heart jump – “who am I to judge what happens in war? You killed nobody. You just made life.”

[identity profile] ideealisme.livejournal.com 2016-07-20 06:17 pm (UTC)(link)
Yeah, not like I have an excuse not to ::sigh:: thanks for commenting!

[identity profile] ideealisme.livejournal.com 2016-07-20 08:27 pm (UTC)(link)
xxo

[identity profile] sallymn.livejournal.com 2016-07-21 08:17 pm (UTC)(link)
Love Lucia's voice, and the choice of words, like the rare touch of 'a-tender' is wonderful :)

[identity profile] ideealisme.livejournal.com 2016-07-24 07:14 pm (UTC)(link)
Thanks, am not even sure that's patois, I think it was more to break up the rhythm prosaically!

[identity profile] sallymn.livejournal.com 2016-07-27 04:34 am (UTC)(link)
Works for me, and is not too strange to jar the reader... it's lovely and colourful :)

RE: Back to Enterprise again

[identity profile] ideealisme.livejournal.com 2016-07-20 06:18 pm (UTC)(link)
Photosynthesising life is remarkably resilient! yay for the moss.

RE: Back to Enterprise again

[identity profile] sallymn.livejournal.com 2016-07-21 08:15 pm (UTC)(link)
Yay for alien plantlife! Is it going to bite them in some way?

RE: Back to Enterprise again

[identity profile] sallymn.livejournal.com 2016-07-24 09:59 am (UTC)(link)
Oooh, that's promising :)

[identity profile] sallymn.livejournal.com 2016-07-19 09:13 pm (UTC)(link)

Another 320 words on the same little dialogue, still very much in Zelenka's POV...

"And where the fuck did you appear from? Quite. Literally." Given that both the contraption and Radek had - presumably - appeared out of nowhere, the gunslinger has a point. But Radek is not nearly as stupid as his Chief Science Officer likes to say on occasion, and knows that telling this terrifying man with his menacing - if disturbingly, genuinely historical-looking - gun the truth is not a good idea until he has a better idea of where he is.

And, as he begins to wonder, when he is.

And what the truth actually is, which Radek has been involved in the Stargate program long enough to know is not always what it appears to be. It is usually much worse.



[identity profile] sallymn.livejournal.com 2016-07-21 08:14 pm (UTC)(link)
And getting Chris of all people to swallow "I travelled in time and space..." is NOT gonna be easy :)

[identity profile] ideealisme.livejournal.com 2016-07-20 06:20 pm (UTC)(link)
Haven't seen the rest of this but looks like he is making the right call to stay quiet for the moment!

[identity profile] sallymn.livejournal.com 2016-07-21 08:14 pm (UTC)(link)
Radek has common sense... more so than anyone else in his world, methinks :)
ext_8151: (mice)

[identity profile] ylla.livejournal.com 2016-07-20 10:08 am (UTC)(link)
I wrote most of an lj post about some plays I went to see, but it's words, right? Exercises the right muscles, or something.

I'm despairing a bit because I'll never catch up with all the things I want to write about - but I could have caught up far more if I hadn't spent so much time knitting things instead, so presumably it's just a case of getting my priorities straight!

[identity profile] ideealisme.livejournal.com 2016-07-20 06:23 pm (UTC)(link)
To be fair, I don't even knit things, and I royally waste time! Hope you get to tackling some of the things on the list.

[identity profile] ideealisme.livejournal.com 2016-07-24 07:28 pm (UTC)(link)
Too right! ::gulps down more revolting tasting iron supplements::

[identity profile] sallymn.livejournal.com 2016-07-21 08:13 pm (UTC)(link)
Words is words. oh yes... and knitting is good too!

In August, I usually post to a little art comm (lj user="naarmamo") and a couple of people have posted pictures of their craft :)