Day 23

[vilakins.livejournal.com]

Here's today's prompt for you to post your updates and any excerpts and thoughts etc in comments.

Comments

[kalinda001.livejournal.com]

As a scene, I loved all of it. But there are bits in it, filler words that you don't normally have in your final versions, which slow this one down and make it seem rambly.

[azdak.livejournal.com]

That's incredibly nice of you - thank you! And yes, wordiness is my besetting sin.