ext_41457 ([identity profile] wiseheart.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] picowrimo2012-07-03 09:19 am

Day 3 (Team July)

Here is the post to update with any extracts, thoughts, or comments you might have for today.

Keep the fires burning!

(Considering the temperatures we're currently having over here, I expect spontaneous self-combusting on my part. *sighs*)

[identity profile] saki101.livejournal.com 2012-07-03 06:52 pm (UTC)(link)
Aaaghhh! Precious parts endangered!!

[identity profile] jenn-calaelen.livejournal.com 2012-07-03 06:54 pm (UTC)(link)
I couldn't face any of the stories I'm supposed to be working on today, so I tidied up and posted a Babylon 5 ficlet I wrote earlier this year (and posted to my journal then).
(link: http://archiveofourown.org/works/450473 (http://archiveofourown.org/works/450473))
But as it is very short, I though I'd post it here as my snippet as well.

Talia's arrival to Psi Corps from the pov of her mentor (Abby)
Abby glanced at herself in the mirror, adjusting her Psi Corp badge. She carefully brushed her hair, resisting the urge to run straight to the child she could hear crying in her mind. Wait at least fifteen minutes, they said, that allows the newcomer to feel that they need the comfort you offer and accept it, and thus they will be open to your mind. She shivered at that - was everything here so manipulative? But her mentor had been wonderful, would she really have wanted things any different? Wasn't all education manipulative on some level?

She looked across at the clock - time.

She turned and opened the door, five steps along the corridor, opened the next door. She sat down and took the crying girl into her arms, letting down her shields to feel her pain and sooth it away. She slowly reached out, the girl's mind was so open that even bit of comfort allowed Abby deeper, until it seemed that she could see every detail of Talia's life. Abby forced her doubts away and slowly pulled the girl closer, dampening the memories of her family to allow her to settle well into Psi Corps.

[identity profile] saki101.livejournal.com 2012-07-03 06:58 pm (UTC)(link)
There was a sudden crack and the notes in his head shattered.

I like shattered, it's implies both violence and fragility, and I want to run after the daydream and hear more about that memory.

(Sorry about the deletion. I put the comment in the wrong place.
Edited 2012-07-03 18:58 (UTC)

[identity profile] saki101.livejournal.com 2012-07-03 07:12 pm (UTC)(link)
Lancelot found that he began to understand why Merlin seemed to hate that word so much.

Tyranny by prophecy. Enforced by sorcery. (Although the sorcery does seem to have been very accurate in indentifying the time of peak fertility.)

[identity profile] saki101.livejournal.com 2012-07-03 07:17 pm (UTC)(link)
Lovely description of the temple and the activities of the temple merchants.

Is the second prayer because they will need to lie alot to succeed and therefore need Storytelling skills?

[identity profile] nathreee.livejournal.com 2012-07-03 07:19 pm (UTC)(link)
you win!

[identity profile] jenn-calaelen.livejournal.com 2012-07-03 07:30 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you! :D

[identity profile] ideealisme.livejournal.com 2012-07-03 07:33 pm (UTC)(link)
oh yeah, all right, didn't see that bit. Ahem :D

[identity profile] saki101.livejournal.com 2012-07-03 07:39 pm (UTC)(link)
It seemed to be what John needed to do after the fall, but he hadn't been allowed more than that brief touch.

[identity profile] saki101.livejournal.com 2012-07-03 07:57 pm (UTC)(link)
I tinkered with that balance a lot. I am very pleased it seems to work.

[identity profile] saki101.livejournal.com 2012-07-03 08:00 pm (UTC)(link)
He's endured so much.

[identity profile] saki101.livejournal.com 2012-07-03 08:12 pm (UTC)(link)
Martin Freeman expressed John's grief so movingly that there was enough to inspire millions of fanfics. The fact that John never got to hold Sherlock after the fall, barely got to touch him, exacerabated his suffering, I think, so I had to try to do something about it.

[identity profile] saki101.livejournal.com 2012-07-03 08:13 pm (UTC)(link)
It makes his stoicism that much more impressive.

[identity profile] saki101.livejournal.com 2012-07-03 08:17 pm (UTC)(link)
This is fascinating!

Wasn't all education manipulative on some level?

And that is an important matter to ponder.
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[identity profile] elmey.livejournal.com 2012-07-03 09:31 pm (UTC)(link)
Oi :D
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[identity profile] elmey.livejournal.com 2012-07-03 09:31 pm (UTC)(link)
What are you doing to our Napoleon?? And he's sans pants on top of it.
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[identity profile] elmey.livejournal.com 2012-07-03 09:35 pm (UTC)(link)
I guess there's a reason it's Psi Corps. A very effective introduction to this relationship!
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[identity profile] elmey.livejournal.com 2012-07-03 09:37 pm (UTC)(link)
Yeah, but I'm not going to give him points for wanting to dally with a married woman.

[identity profile] ideealisme.livejournal.com 2012-07-03 09:38 pm (UTC)(link)
He can come around my place and be not upset as much as he likes :)

[identity profile] ideealisme.livejournal.com 2012-07-03 09:39 pm (UTC)(link)
I don't know B5 but this reminds me of Counselor Troi and the manipulative nature of her power. Interesting to see Abby's ambivalence about it.
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[identity profile] elmey.livejournal.com 2012-07-03 09:40 pm (UTC)(link)
Aw thanks :) Holes in the plot... don't say that!!
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[identity profile] elmey.livejournal.com 2012-07-03 09:43 pm (UTC)(link)
and you have so much more to sort out! One of the problems is, that when I have an idea, I don't always have the patience to put it in the section it should go, and trying to find it later.... I'm always convinced others are much more organized :)

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