I was trying to write the connecting scenes, right? Well, did write some and then I starting writing scenes after the freezer scene! An excerpt -
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John listened outside the door. It was silent within. Rest. What Sherlock had been doing for months had clearly allowed him little time for it. Pain was exhausting; John knew, of course, and he had an idea of how much chemical burns hurt. Biochemical burns. John corrected himself and his eyes dropped to his hands.
He had been afraid of skin to skin contact near the wounds, had managed to avoid it while debriding and disinfecting them. John had wanted Mike or Molly to do it, but Sherlock had been adamant in his refusal.
“I may hurt you by accident,” John said and his hands clenched at the idea of it and the memory of Molly exclaiming and shaking her finger after he had kissed it, how his lips had thrummed from touching the tiny pinprick.
“I’m tired, John,” Sherlock had replied as if that summed up everything.
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Would appreciate views on my use of the past perfect. I have been lectured on its modern usage and that I tend to overuse it. This bit includes a flashback within a flashback though.
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John listened outside the door. It was silent within. Rest. What Sherlock had been doing for months had clearly allowed him little time for it. Pain was exhausting; John knew, of course, and he had an idea of how much chemical burns hurt. Biochemical burns. John corrected himself and his eyes dropped to his hands.
He had been afraid of skin to skin contact near the wounds, had managed to avoid it while debriding and disinfecting them. John had wanted Mike or Molly to do it, but Sherlock had been adamant in his refusal.
“I may hurt you by accident,” John said and his hands clenched at the idea of it and the memory of Molly exclaiming and shaking her finger after he had kissed it, how his lips had thrummed from touching the tiny pinprick.
“I’m tired, John,” Sherlock had replied as if that summed up everything.
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Would appreciate views on my use of the past perfect. I have been lectured on its modern usage and that I tend to overuse it. This bit includes a flashback within a flashback though.