I've fallen off the Picowagon a bit, mainly because I've just been reading Chandler and not getting any actual writing done. I have thought a little about my protagonist's backstory, and pondered to what extent I ought to follow a beta's advice to give him a bit more agency, without much outcome. (Or any useful thoughts on how I might give him more agency if that's needed...)
I think I'm going to take someone's advice and start on an easier section, as all the demands on this bridging section seem to be getting me down. A teaser of the recalcitrant bit, a mix of new, edited & original; this follows from ch 5 (http://archiveofourown.org/works/276049/chapters/700124) and goes immediately before the snatch of dialogue I posted earlier...
Now the baby princess had got her big secret off her flat chest she was happy to be bundled into a cab headed straight up to the palace. As the kid seemed to have taken such a shine to the lieutenant woman, I figured the two of them could use some quality time together. I took the chance to pinch the broad’s sergeant. Turned out it was my old pal Hornbeam. The pair of us went way back. Back when he was the short guy to my tall guy, and Hali was the straight guy to Groundsel’s—
Hornbeam was the only one who’d stuck it out in CHOP. He hadn’t changed much. He was still as short as a prima donna’s temper. He’d never grow any taller now. None of us would.
Not written with Picopower, as I finished it on 31 May, but someone here might conceivably be interested in my Sutcliff Swap story: The Boy with Wolf's Eyes (http://archiveofourown.org/works/4044559) (The Mark of the Horse Lord). It's a vignette that started out edging into horror but my beta persuaded me to unpack the ending so it slides into something rather more comfortable. Interested in what people think!
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on 2015-06-10 10:30 pm (UTC)I think I'm going to take someone's advice and start on an easier section, as all the demands on this bridging section seem to be getting me down. A teaser of the recalcitrant bit, a mix of new, edited & original; this follows from ch 5 (http://archiveofourown.org/works/276049/chapters/700124) and goes immediately before the snatch of dialogue I posted earlier...
Now the baby princess had got her big secret off her flat chest she was happy to be bundled into a cab headed straight up to the palace. As the kid seemed to have taken such a shine to the lieutenant woman, I figured the two of them could use some quality time together. I took the chance to pinch the broad’s sergeant. Turned out it was my old pal Hornbeam. The pair of us went way back. Back when he was the short guy to my tall guy, and Hali was the straight guy to Groundsel’s—
Hornbeam was the only one who’d stuck it out in CHOP. He hadn’t changed much. He was still as short as a prima donna’s temper. He’d never grow any taller now. None of us would.
Not written with Picopower, as I finished it on 31 May, but someone here might conceivably be interested in my Sutcliff Swap story: The Boy with Wolf's Eyes (http://archiveofourown.org/works/4044559) (The Mark of the Horse Lord). It's a vignette that started out edging into horror but my beta persuaded me to unpack the ending so it slides into something rather more comfortable. Interested in what people think!