I wrote nearly 3 pages of the summary chapter today. God, it was tedious. Like pulling teeth. Sitting over the novel and tormenting my brains: this should go into the story, no, this is not necessary, but yes, otherwise it won't make any sense for those not familiar with the novel, rubbish, the ones who know it would die of boredom... and so forth. The day I finish this sucker I'll open a bottle of champagne or whatnot. Er. Yes. Sorry for the whining.
Excerpt:
“You do not believe he has truly changed,” Cuhelyn said. It was not a question but Hywel nodded nonetheless.
“Do you?” he asked back.
Cuhelyn shook his head. “No; but I am hardly impartial when it comes to him. Your father may have extracted a price for Anarawd’s death through your hand, but that means not that I have forgotten – or forgiven – on whose behalf my lord was murdered. Neither can I believe that a land-hungry prince who has already betrayed his own people out of greed would change his heart all of a sudden.”
“And rightly so,” Hywel agreed. “I am certain that he believes he can manipulate Father into solving the problem for him again, as he had done so too often in the past. I fear we have not seen the last of him yet.”
Thank you. I go with the novel, mostly, because the events described are actual historical ones, so I don't have much leeway in the matter. But I don't want to copy the novel, hence the summary version.
Nah, he is not so bad, really, if you consider the fact that the other guy had (indirectly) his lord and lover killed and he lost his dominant hand while trying to save him. Also, having sworn absolute fealty to his murdered Prince meant that he gave up his claim for the lands of his family and stood there crippled and penniless and without the family bonds that meanteverything in medieval Wales. So, he had legitimate reason to be less than forgiving.
Brothers-in-Arms
on 2015-06-27 04:59 pm (UTC)Excerpt:
“You do not believe he has truly changed,” Cuhelyn said. It was not a question but Hywel nodded nonetheless.
“Do you?” he asked back.
Cuhelyn shook his head. “No; but I am hardly impartial when it comes to him. Your father may have extracted a price for Anarawd’s death through your hand, but that means not that I have forgotten – or forgiven – on whose behalf my lord was murdered. Neither can I believe that a land-hungry prince who has already betrayed his own people out of greed would change his heart all of a sudden.”
“And rightly so,” Hywel agreed. “I am certain that he believes he can manipulate Father into solving the problem for him again, as he had done so too often in the past. I fear we have not seen the last of him yet.”
Re: Brothers-in-Arms
on 2015-06-27 06:45 pm (UTC)You might have to pick either for it to work only with the novel, or for it to stand alone, if both isn't going to be possible.
And I like your extract again. You write this period so well.
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on 2015-06-27 08:53 pm (UTC)RE: Brothers-in-Arms
on 2015-06-27 07:44 pm (UTC)Cuhelyn seems to have his head screwed on the right way!
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on 2015-06-27 08:53 pm (UTC)RE: Brothers-in-Arms
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on 2015-06-27 10:52 pm (UTC)RE: Brothers-in-Arms
on 2015-06-28 09:35 am (UTC)Cuhelyn sounds a most unpleasant fellow.
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on 2015-06-28 10:48 am (UTC)no subject
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on 2015-06-30 12:30 pm (UTC)RE: Brothers-in-Arms
on 2015-06-28 06:36 pm (UTC)Great dialogue - it shows the way that they are struggling to accept and act with the situation!
RE: Brothers-in-Arms
on 2015-06-29 05:41 pm (UTC)