I admire your discipline - writing on the train must be awfully hard. And it's certainly paying off.
Have you considered putting Zack's observations about Rob's missing backpack into the dialogue? It would make sense for him to explain why he thinks the video is a fake, rather than just insisting that it is.
Thanks. Writing on the train is much easier now I have a netbook.
Campbell, being less of a conspiracy theorist than Zack, might explain the backack away as Rob having taken it off somewhere. What Zack needs is actual proof that Rob was elsewhere when the film was supposedly shot, and he does actually have that. He just doesn't realise it yet. Then again I may yet tweak the dialogue as well.
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on 2009-11-29 07:50 pm (UTC)Have you considered putting Zack's observations about Rob's missing backpack into the dialogue? It would make sense for him to explain why he thinks the video is a fake, rather than just insisting that it is.
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on 2009-11-29 08:31 pm (UTC)Campbell, being less of a conspiracy theorist than Zack, might explain the backack away as Rob having taken it off somewhere. What Zack needs is actual proof that Rob was elsewhere when the film was supposedly shot, and he does actually have that. He just doesn't realise it yet. Then again I may yet tweak the dialogue as well.