Day 4 (Team July)

[kerravonsen]

Yes, I'm butting in here to post, because it's evening of the 4th here, and there is no post! So join me in the boasting progress reports and encouragement for this day's creative work!

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[elmey.livejournal.com]

Still working on the part after the prologue. It turns out that Illya may not have been having a particularly pleasant daydream about Vienna:


(Illya) moved away from the window, leaned back against the wall next to it, keeping himself in the shadows. He crossed his arms to hide the betraying twitch of his hands and tried to order his jumbled thoughts.

"Before you came back tonight, I was thinking about Semenov. About Vienna. About what happened that night. There are... things I don't remember." He could feel the subtle change in the intensity of Napoleon's attention, saw the way he leaned forward to listen, the way it took a beat for him to respond.

"It was five years ago", Napoleon said very carefully.

[saki101.livejournal.com]

He could feel the subtle change in the intensity of Napoleon's attention, saw the way he leaned forward to listen, the way it took a beat for him to respond.

I love this description of Napoleon's concern, how judiciously he responds.

Given Illya's milieu, if the memory takes a turn towards the darker side it won't be surprising.

[elmey.livejournal.com]

Napoleon knows there's something Illya hasn't told him, and he's still trying to read between the lines.

[jenn-calaelen.livejournal.com]

Good scene - it sounds like Napoleon probably knows where this is going...

[elmey.livejournal.com]

He's trying not to scare Illya off since getting him to talk is like pulling teeth.

[ideealisme.livejournal.com]

Looks like this is a conversation that has been coming on a long time.

[elmey.livejournal.com]

There's quite a bit of back and forth before this, and Napoleon thinks they're finally getting to the point.

[akane42me.livejournal.com]

Very nice characterization there, the cautious feeling of the conversation: Illya crossing his arms, Napoleon''s careful response.

[elmey.livejournal.com]

Napoleon knows if he says the wrong thing Illya will skitter away again, it's like pulling teeth getting him to talk in the first place!

[vilakins.livejournal.com]

Whatever it was, Napoleon knows it's a sensitive subject.

[elmey.livejournal.com]

Well he knows Illya's been avoiding it!

[stevie-carroll.livejournal.com]

A tricky bit of conversation there.

[elmey.livejournal.com]

Yeah, it comes after a long back and forth--I think I got it to work now though.

[kerravonsen]

Oh, I like this. Poor Illya. And both of them so very careful not to seem emotional.

[elmey.livejournal.com]

God forbid they show emotion! They're both making certain calculations.

[espresso-addict.livejournal.com]

I love their careful exchanges. Keep at it!

[el-staplador.livejournal.com]

This feels really tense.