Day 7 (Team July)

[wiseheart.livejournal.com]

Here is the post to update with any extracts, thoughts, or comments you might have for today.

I'm saying good-bye for a week, leaving you in the most capable hands of elmey until Day 15. Happy writing!

Comments

[steph2311.livejournal.com]

Here goes..... my first snippet to this comm..... so embarassed. BE GENTLE.

The young boys toes scrunched. His feet felt the damp of the woodland beneath, the earth that his father had taught him to love. Mikael's undernourished fingernails gripped as hard as they could into the bark of the towering pine. He heard his father's booming, once reassuring, voice still echo in his ears.
"RUN!"

[ideealisme.livejournal.com]

Welcome! I am intrigued by this snippet. I am guessing Mikael's father is no longer here and that a dreadful catastrophe has taken place.

[steph2311.livejournal.com]

The dirt iritated the skin betweween his talons.

[ideealisme.livejournal.com]

Sorry, is that a follow-on from the last snippet? Just a little confused!

[steph2311.livejournal.com]

Crap, sorry that's a copy/ paste error. That's what I get for posting in the early hours when I'm tired

[steph2311.livejournal.com]

Thanks.....

yeah, the catastrophe has taken place

[ideealisme.livejournal.com]

ah ok. So Mikael's first imperative is simply to survive.

[saki101.livejournal.com]

You packed a lot into a few lines, vivid description, background information and action! Looking forward to more.

[elmey.livejournal.com]

Welcome, and don't worry--this is a great place to try things out; we're all struggling writers :)

I like the way this evokes a sense of panic, the loss of comfort in what was familiar.

[steph2311.livejournal.com]

Thank you

To me my Mikael is raw and I want to develope him

[stevie-carroll.livejournal.com]

An intriguing first post there.

[steph2311.livejournal.com]

Thank you

[jenn-calaelen.livejournal.com]

Very vivid snippet! :)

[steph2311.livejournal.com]

Thanks