Day 8 (Team July)

[elmey.livejournal.com]

wiseheart is off carousing (I hope) on a well deserved vacation, and I'll be leaving the prompt posts for the next week.

So here's today's prompt for your updates and any extracts, thoughts, or comments you might have.

Comments

[six-old-cars.livejournal.com]

The pluperfect feels fine here to me, though I wonder whether “I may hurt you by accident,” John said should also be pluperfect. The use of plu for entry and exit of a flashback in normal past tense... seems to me to need a longer flashback. The nested flashback is OK here as it's only mentioned as a memory. Even if it gets de-nested into a parallel flashback in the reader's head, I don't see a problem with that.

[saki101.livejournal.com]

Thank you. I'll add in a couple more hads. :-)