I've finished Chapter 7. Phew. It will need proofreading and rechecking before I'd actually post it, but at least it's done for now.
Excerpt:
They emerge again a short time later, in a steamy maze of vertical, diagonal and horizontal conduits, escorted by the three Suliban, who now hold Archer’s plasma pistol. The situation has vague similarities to an official arrest.
“Do you think they’re taking us to their leader?” Archer jokes. Hoshi’s wordless glare speaks volumes. “No, I don’t think so, either,” he continues, completely unfazed by the fact that they’ve been captured.
Hoshi gives him another glare. “Be careful what you wish for, Captain – you might get it!”
Where they’re actually brought is a small, open area, where Sandra and Ianto are already being held. It’s obviously very warm in there because Sandra has already shed her parka and is about to get rid of her blouse without taking off her corset.
“What?” she snaps at Archer whose eyes are widening at the sight. “It’s boiling hot in here; and it’s not as if the lizards would care.”
Kudos on chapter finishing! Holidays are clearly very good for your writing. I like the steamy maze of vertical, diagonal and horizontal conduits, very atmospheric. And I can well see alien reptiles being indifferent to human mammary development, where spaceship captains are not :)
Very observant! You've picked out a line of description I lifted from the rejected original script! *g* You see what I meant about needing to proofread and edit, eh?
Not in canon, he isn't. Scott Bakula's character has the personality of a dead goldfish; a friend of mine used to call him Captain Sockface. *g* So I made him a descendant of Jack Harkness (who, according to Torchwood canon, was married at some point, in the late 19th or early 20th century), gave him a similar personality and "cast" John Barrowman to play him. A Starfleet captain ought to have charisma, dammit, and lots of it!
Bakula isn't the problem. He does his best with a poorly-written character, even though he could use more than one facial expression in the process. I quite like him in NCIS New Orleans. I don't like canon!Archer!
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A Matter of Time
on 2015-07-29 02:30 pm (UTC)Excerpt:
They emerge again a short time later, in a steamy maze of vertical, diagonal and horizontal conduits, escorted by the three Suliban, who now hold Archer’s plasma pistol. The situation has vague similarities to an official arrest.
“Do you think they’re taking us to their leader?” Archer jokes. Hoshi’s wordless glare speaks volumes. “No, I don’t think so, either,” he continues, completely unfazed by the fact that they’ve been captured.
Hoshi gives him another glare. “Be careful what you wish for, Captain – you might get it!”
Where they’re actually brought is a small, open area, where Sandra and Ianto are already being held. It’s obviously very warm in there because Sandra has already shed her parka and is about to get rid of her blouse without taking off her corset.
“What?” she snaps at Archer whose eyes are widening at the sight. “It’s boiling hot in here; and it’s not as if the lizards would care.”
The Suliban seem fairly indifferent indeed.
Re: A Matter of Time
on 2015-07-29 03:04 pm (UTC)RE: Re: A Matter of Time
on 2015-07-29 03:52 pm (UTC)You see what I meant about needing to proofread and edit, eh?
RE: A Matter of Time
on 2015-07-29 08:47 pm (UTC)no subject
on 2015-07-29 08:59 pm (UTC)RE: A Matter of Time
on 2015-07-29 10:45 pm (UTC)I want to know who else is shedding clothes :)
no subject
on 2015-07-30 01:31 pm (UTC)RE: A Matter of Time
on 2015-07-30 01:11 am (UTC)The Captain might be topless soon, too, I imagine.
no subject
on 2015-07-30 01:32 pm (UTC)RE: A Matter of Time
on 2015-07-30 09:08 pm (UTC)Archer is something of a character, I take it {g}
RE: A Matter of Time
on 2015-07-30 10:23 pm (UTC)So I made him a descendant of Jack Harkness (who, according to Torchwood canon, was married at some point, in the late 19th or early 20th century), gave him a similar personality and "cast" John Barrowman to play him. A Starfleet captain ought to have charisma, dammit, and lots of it!
RE: A Matter of Time
on 2015-08-01 09:50 am (UTC)RE: A Matter of Time
on 2015-08-01 01:50 pm (UTC)RE: A Matter of Time
on 2015-08-02 07:18 pm (UTC)